This can’t be happening!


 Writing 101 Day Five: Be Brief

You discover a letter on a path that affects you deeply. Today, write about this encounter. And your twist? Be as succinct as possible.

 

I heard a knock at the door and then running feet.  Someone had pushed a note under the door.  The note was addressed to “Babe.” 

My curiosity took over and I couldn’t resist reading the note:  “I should have told you this a long time ago.  My HIV test results came back and I’m…”  The word is unreadable due to smudged ink. 

My heart begins to beat fast!  Who is this note for?  I have two roommates and at one time or another our boyfriends have called us “Babe.” 

I quickly dial my boyfriend’s number and receive his voice mail.  Oh, I forgot he’s in his big meeting today about his scholarship.  I text him – CALL ME ASAP!  I text my roommates 911 – COME HOME NOW!

12 thoughts on “This can’t be happening!”

  1. Um… WOW!!!!

    I’d have NEVER thought to take the challenge to this particular level.

    The only criticism that I’d give would be about the structure of the work itself. Breaking this up into paragraphs might help strengthen the power of what you’ve put out here. Otherwise, I’m impressed!

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